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» left by Homer from NorthEastFlorida 4 years 358 days ago.

The article "Dare to Dream Big Dreams...." was among those listed as initiating new volunteer reviewing. Article would have seemed more altruistic and serving others if it had included fewer egocentric references, e.g. of the three lead in paragraphs, 2 start out with the character/word "I."

Moreover, the listing of 6 steps to dream realization probably were not revealed in sequence, as is insinuated in step 2 where author says "The second point that God has taught me...."

Credulity could have been better rendered had not almost every paragraph and/or "point" included exlamation marks!!! Some times even three of them, as if commands "Act Astonished," which the reader is not apt to do on command. Similarly, the use of a question mark immediately followed by an exclamation mark is confusing if not downright illogical. I was unable to conjure up on demand any feeling of incredulity followed by one of emphatic agreement.

From context I infer that this article was written by one of the Christian faith, yet--without having checked biblical chapter and verse as to what speaker was being quoted--not a single observation by Jesus is included in an article loaded with quotes and references. Perhaps writer had never been exposed to Thomas Jefferson's editing of Scripture which consisted of ignoring all but direct statements attributed to Jesus.

A more instructive exposition of prayer and realization is found in articles/chapters of the book "Teach us to Pray" by Charles and Cora Fillmore (founders of Unity School of Christianity) which is/are now about a century old.

They would agree with the contemporary writers Esther and Jerry Hicks that the apparent delay in realization of dreams (Step 6), is due to the "buffer of time," to the readjustments within what we call external reality in order that that which is truly miraculous is seen and understood as having been effected by logical and explainable circumstances.

This article's author could morely brightly hone the heart of her message by trimming first. Even the rhetorical opening "Dare to Dream...," seeking to challenge and engage, actually from the start engages difference of opinion; one could argue that every dream is of consquence, is a "big" one. But this is only one point among others which an English teacher might mark, "Cliche' thinking." That if they do that anymore and don't now accept anything as politically correct.

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» left by Eve Juurik 4 years 358 days ago.

Dear Dr. Bud Custead, Thank You so much for visiting my site. Thank You for reading the article and leaving such a long comment. I truly appreciate that You have taken so much time to write down what You think. I am grateful for constructive criticism for it only helps me to become a better writer. I completely agree with You that I use too many exclamation marks... and I have removed most of them. It is hard to express the excitement though that I feel about the Word of God and the wonderful promises of the Lord and His Love... so I tend to overdo the exclamation marks. Though I did leave the question mark and exclamation mark together... as to my mind it expresses what I want to express - a question and a exclamation of joy in one :-) I will have to re-read Your article as to be honest, I did not understand all of what You were saying... and no, I have not read the materials that You are refering to. I am sharing my faith and my experiences. I am sharing what I have learned works and I am sharing it because I do believe it will help someone else too. I am grateful though, that although we do see God differently oftentimes and we do express our faith differently, we can still be sisters and brothers in Christ and love one another in Him. I wish You many, many blessings and success in all You do, Eve Juurik

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